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Celtic crosses, crooked and worn,
find joy among the spring;
the evil that was long ago born
has left the fairy ring.

And I have left, broken and torn,
for the bells have yet to sing -
just emptiness and seldom a scorn;
the daffodils demean.
A poem for St. Patrick's Day. :shamrock: I hope you enjoy! Feedback is much appreciated. (:
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AsakoBunny Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
I like to call st.patty's day "the welcoming of spring". Considering the fact that usually we get the very last snowfall then... Key word usually.
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WalkinginDreamlight Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Beautiful poem, Serene, with nice flow and imagery.

Though I agree with :iconlibrarian-of-hell: the word 'demean' breaks the flow of the poem.

How I would write the end line:

where only the beauty of daffodils remain.
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librarian-of-hell Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Maybe. Still an awkward rhyme though. (Or at least i see it that way as a foreigner, it might be wrong, lol.)
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WalkinginDreamlight Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Ahh, Serene has already replied :)
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librarian-of-hell Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
ok, die then.
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librarian-of-hell Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
ok, die then.
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librarian-of-hell Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
ok, die then.
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SereneCyrene Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2014  Student General Artist
Thank you both for the feedback. :aww: But I think I will keep it as is, for now. "Demean" is the only word that fits what I'm trying to say. 
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WalkinginDreamlight Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
That's all that matters, Serene :)

To St Patrick and his Pirate friends! :ahoy:
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librarian-of-hell Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
fair enough :)
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